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Some people believe that men and women are equal so, women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that men and women are not equal therefore, there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. What is your opinion?

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Thesedays
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These days
,
equality
 between working men and
women
 is a serious controversy. There is a common belief that
women
 achieve
equality
 with men in their
job
 ,so they can be active in any field. While, another common belief about
this
 approach is that there is not any
equality
 between them,
therefore
women
 should do
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the especial
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especial
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job
 which is appropriate for them. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of
argument
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the argument
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 and give my opinion. It is
certain
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 true that one of the essential aims of achieving
equality
 between men and
women
 in
their
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 workplace is
women
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for women
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 would show their best performance. If they feel
more
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 equal situation in their career, they will perform efficiently.
For example
, countries
such
 as Sweden and Iceland, have been monitoring to implement the
equality
 in
job
 promotion, salary and stuff like that between both genders in their workplace, so the official statistics illustrate far more performance of
women
. Generally,
This
 approach probably can have
positive
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 impact on societies’ economic
circumstance
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.
In addition
, having equal opportunities could minimize the limitation of
women
’s
career
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.
For instance
, in developed countries students are competing for certain majors, including
women
, because they would rather seize
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especial
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 major and profession which is appropriate for them.
Therefore
, in modern societies,
this
 approach can contribute to
decrease
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 the demand
in
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certain
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job
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jobs
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.
However
, gender inequality would provide a situation,
which
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women
 perhaps benefit from their instinct. It means that
,
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women
 can have
better
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 function in
certain
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a certain
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job
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jobs
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, which is related to
women
’s
instinct
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instincts
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 like
,
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 kindergarten trainer, nursing and even teaching. If
women
 adopt their career whit their instinct and spirit, they will probably move up the ladder. As a
results
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, some jobs which are much more practical and far from fragile
women
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women's
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spirit
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spirits
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 can not be suitable for them.
secondly
,
inequality
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the inequality
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 situation of
women
’s
job
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jobs
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 can be related to their domestic duty.
In other words
,
women
 have essential responsibilities as a mother that they may need to juggle both their household chores and
job
.
Moreover
, some
profession
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 could not provide
safe
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a safe
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 and suitable environment for them like
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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