Traffic and housing problems in major cities could be solved by moving large companies and factories and their employees to the countryside. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays,
cities
face
issues
like
traffic
and housing
problems
. It is often said that relocating the big
companies
and
factories
along with their workers to the
countryside
would eliminate
such
issues
in these
cities
. In my opinion, the answer is not in favour of
this
approach. Big
companies
and
factories
generate employment in the
cities
and help
people
in maintaining their standard of living. While
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
taking away these opportunities from them can result in
further
problems
like less income and would lead them to travel to the
countryside
for work.
Also
,
people
may feel homesick if they would not opt for up-down of their daily travel and might visit home only on weekends due to the long distance between
cities
and the
countryside
. Even, these
people
may lose their jobs as
companies
would be interested in hiring local
people
in the
countryside
.
Therefore
,
this
idea would not appropriately target the
traffic
and housing
issues
but rather will add to other
problems
. These
issues
can be taken care of by other better solutions if the government looks at the matter. Talking about another possible solution to reduce
traffic
in
cities
and accommodation
problems
, the government must build new properties by acquiring the open space available.
This
way, the
cities
can be
further
developed if there is
such
construction of new housing flats giving more space to
people
residing here. Looking at the issue of
traffic
, it can be dealt with by widening the
roads
or reconstructing the bad state of
roads
so that vehicles can run smoothly. Another way could be, to introduce innovative ways
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
running of the vehicles on the
roads
.
For example
, an odd-even formula so that number of running cars on the
roads
can be less. In conclusion, moving the big
companies
and
factories
and workers to the
countryside
would lead to other
problems
like reduced employment and low income for
such
people
. Whereas, solutions like widening of the
roads
and construction of the new flats seem to be helpful in order to curb
such
issues
in the
cities
.
Therefore
, I fully disagree with the idea of movement of the
companies
and
factories
to the
countryside
.
Submitted by jasleenkaurjolly on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: