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The consumption of the world's resources is increasing at a dangerous rate. What are causes and solutions?

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Over the past decades, the
consumption
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 of the earth's
resources
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 is growing at an alarming rate.
This
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overconsumption
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over
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overconsumption
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consumption
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 of
resources
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 including
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Populations and increasing amounts of fuel-driven
vehicles
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.
This
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also
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 suggest solutions to
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this problems
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these problems
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 including
reduction
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 in the
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 of
vehicles
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 and controlling the population growth. Needless to
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 the source of origin of Snags related to the excessive
consumption
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 of natural
ressouces
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resources
resource
are
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 multitudinous.
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However
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 the
conspicous
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conspicuous
 among them is
perpetually
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the perpetually
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 inclining
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number
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a number
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 of masses. In
order
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 to support a large
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number of
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populace
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the populace
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, the natural
resources
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 are diminishing rapidly.
Besides
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this
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, the fuels-driven
vehicles
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 are
also
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 responsible for
this
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 trend. If the
number
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 of
vehicles
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 grows drastically, the
consumption
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 of oils and gases would rise exponentially, which would affect the tat total amount of natural
resources
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. of natural
resources
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. A survey conducted by ILO in 2015,
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, revealed that on
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average, the usage of crude oil has
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increased
60
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%
than
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 it was in the past.
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, it is perceptible why
this
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as a
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grove
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grave
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 threat. Are there any measures to combat
this
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 problem ? Certainly, there are. Having identified the root of the issue, a good remedy can
of
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the
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be controlling population blasts. More so,
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a reduction
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 in the
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 of persons not only
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 the use of fuels but
also
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 protect the world from getting polluted. Apart from
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 the
number
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 of private cars can be reduced and public awareness should be increased in
order
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 to use the public transportation like trains, subways. Various studies conducted in
UK
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the UK
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 have concluded that the
consumption
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 of fuel has
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declined more than 40% since 2015 due to the construction of
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the metro-rail
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metro-rail
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metro rail
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.
therefore
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, in
order
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 to Solve an issue government must play a vital role so that the population and
number
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 of
vehicles
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 can be controlled. In conclusion, in
this
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first
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consumption
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 of natural
resources
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are
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 increasing drastically
everyday
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. In
order
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 to protect the earth, government
as well as
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, as well as public masses,
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public
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the public
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 masses should play their own roles properly.
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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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