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In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

#countries #people #newspapers #news #tv
Recently years, the number of
people
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internet
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 young generation, they are consuming the
internet
 more than elderly
people
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majority
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 of them have smartphones.
Therefore
, they can easily access to
internet
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 from
the
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any
places
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 they want. Because of that, most
of
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young
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people
 get
any
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information from
the
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social network and TV
instead
 of reading the newspapers. On the one hand, receiving and taking the
news
 through the
internet
 and TV can
be save
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 their time and it
also
be
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 good
opportunities
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 for accumulate
many
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kind
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 of information at
same
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 time.
On the other hand
, in some
of
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cases
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, the
news
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internet
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 or social networks
are
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 fake. The reason why
,
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every
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 person can post and input any
news
 on those things without any filter. As a consequence, it has
risk
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 to get false and fake
news
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 their brain. In my opinion, one of the main solutions which can suggest
to read
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 newspapers for young
people
 is
improve
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 the distribution channels of newspapers to them.
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