Some say that music, art, and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at the primary level. Do you agree or disagree?

Over the past decades, the world has changed in a

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and hectic schedule, especially in the education and

children

's

developments

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. Some people dispute that

parents

should be focused on their kids' learning activities,

such

as teaching their personality and manner

instead

of

other school subject

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. I completely agree with

this

opinion even though some people might have different aspects.

This

essay will seek to examine the complex issue. On the one hand, I would like to point out that there are various reasons to consider learning soft skills in

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childhood. Before all else, playing

time

at an early age plays a pivotal role to

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develop

children

physically and mentally.

Moreover

, they deserve some duration before their dreadful all-day-long education

time

. As a matter of fact, some scientists say it is ultimately important to count the sentiment of a child, which can drive them to a successful

life

.

For example

, if the

parents

did not share enough

time

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communication and social skill with their

peer

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, they would not considerate of others.

On the other hand

, I would like to express an equal view that there are several drawbacks

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this

issue.

First

of all,

parents

tend to push their

children

into education in order to pursue a straightforward

life

.

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Despite

the fact

parents

always wish the best for

thier

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their

babies, they should not force their

children

desperately in order to prevent negative

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.

Besides

, they can feel frustrated and self-disappointment

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their inability to please their beloved

parents

. In a worst-case scenario, they can even face the mental disorder if their

parents

push them to the edge of

life

. To avoid

this

situation becoming any worse, people should relax and encourage their

children

's

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, and give more

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parenting. In conclusion,

although

there are some arguments and different opinions, I passionately believe that

children

can start their young

life

powerfully and peacefully with the help of

familiy

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family

members

instead

of studying regular school subjects.