It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child's development are media, pop culture and friends. A different point of view is that family plays the most significant role.

It is generally argued by some that different types of social

media

and friends’

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affect the

children’s

upbringings

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. While some people believe that

parents

’ role

is

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profoundly

influence

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offspring's

personality

.

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the views but, in my opinion, the latter has

more

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dramatic impact. On the one hand,

children’s

mental and physical development is mainly affected by their surroundings. Many believe social

media

and

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group

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can shape kids’

personality

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personalities

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.

In other words

,

media

platform

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like television and pop affect them. When they start watching it, not only see the fashion trend

,

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but

also

adopt the same in their lives.

Moreover

, when little ones go out of their houses, they meet different people with different cultures and

behaviors

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. So, their

personality

will be impressed.

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, my niece desires to have clothes

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as princesses in animations.

On the other hand

,

parents

have a significant role in

development

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the development

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of

children’s

personality

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.

In other words

, when kids are born, they see their

parents

from the very

first

second

.

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, they are just in

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with them and will copy their

behavior

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.

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, if

parents

have always

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together,

and

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then

children will learn and exhibit in facing

with

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others. So, in my perspective,

parents

are more profoundly

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on

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character

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of children in comparing to social

media

and

peers’

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group

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. To sum

up

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the

children’s

surroundings have

profound

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impact on their

personality

.

However

, I believe that

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parent’s

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role is more influential in

comparing

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to social

media

and friend

group

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.