Some people consider playing sports are beneficial for school children. Some, however, believe sport activities also have some drawbacks. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of children playing sports.

It is believed that sports are beneficial for students.While some people opposed
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statement as they consider it
also
has negative effects.
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children including supportive reasons. Active activities have several benefits to youngsters in both socializing and mental health.
To begin
with, children are more likely to interact with their classmates when playing games,
as a
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they have an opportunity to develop social skills.
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, the majority of schools have sports
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for children
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in order to improve
friendship
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and create more harmony.
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teenagers in stress reduction from study and assignments.
A research
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has shown that physical movements lead
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to release dopamine which is known as a stress preventer hormone in
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.As a consequence, young generations have less chance of facing depression and other mental health issues in a long term.
On the other hand
, physical
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such
as broken bones and muscle strains may occur from accidents during the plays.
This
may cause student absences as they are recovering at home or the hospitals which will affect
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grades and understanding of knowledge in class.A survey conducted by schools has shown that students who have been damaged from sports usually cannot attend to the classroom for an average
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days.Obviously,
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that
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10 periods. In conclusion, joining games
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positive effects on youngsters’ mental health and social skills.
However
, it may damage individuals’ bodies in case of an accident.
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