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Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think this is good. Others thinks face to face interaction is essential. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In
this
 day and age, people think it's ok to make new
friends
 through social apps and internet forums.
However
 many people disagree, saying that
face
 to
face
 interaction is crucial. In
this
 essay, we will discuss both views and give my opinion. Nowadays, making new
friends
 across the globe is easier, thanks to social
media
. Before
theinternet
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the internet
 was invented we relied on
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mails
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emails
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 to message our
friends
 across the globe, and that takes a lot of time to receive our
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emails
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mails
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. Whereas, nowadays Through social
media
such
 as Facebook, Twitter, and Reddit we can communicate with each other in a matter of seconds. On the other end of the spectrum, social
media
 takes away the human element of making
friends
, which is
face
 to
face
 interaction. Social
media
 may bring
friends
 from afar closer ,
however
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 it
also
 alienates
from
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people close to us.
For instance
, we prefer chatting with our
friends
 through Facebook and looking at Instagram rather than having a conversation with our families or
friends
that is
next
 to us. In conclusion, I think social
media
 has its place for making new
friends
, but, let's not forget to make
friends
 in the real world.
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