You have decided to leave your current job and look for a new one. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter: -explain why you want to leave your current job -describe what kind of job you are looking for -ask for some help or advice

#job #friend #-explain #-describe #-ask #help #advice

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Dear Yash, Hi, I hope you are in good

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heath

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and enjoying your life. Writing

this

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letter to seek some advice on getting

new

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job as I am leaving my current organisation. As you know that I have

strated

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started

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organisation just to get

stable

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lifestyle for

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not for

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. Working as an Accounts manager I started

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myself and at

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point

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I really need to move on. Working in that field in which you have

least

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interest makes you irritated and

lathargic

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lethargic

so I have decided to follow my passion. I was really interested in photography from school time and started posting those pictures online

few

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years back. So I am looking for

job

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as a photographer in Mumbai. I have approached one magazine based in Mumbai which usually

hire

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photographers for travel and they liked my pictures and asked me to move to that city. As you are living there for so long, could you please give me some advice on taking

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job or I should try for another opportunity in

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field

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where I can do work according to my skills. It would be helpful if you provide any references. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Pay my regards to

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and aunt. Yours truly, Amar

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

215 words

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