You came to know about a piece of equipment that would help you at your workplace. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

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Dear Ashley, I hope

this

letter finds you well. I am writing to share my learning experience on a new tablet provided by the company.

Mr.

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Chon handed it to me

last

Friday, and I have been using the equipment to see how it would work when we sell the insurance services. Among other tablets, it has by far the largest 15inch AMOLED display along with an attachable keyboard.

Thus

, I believe that

this

unusual tablet would be beneficial to us in several ways.

First

, it would be greatly useful when we consult potential clients while we try to explain new insurance products, using

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bigger display as if we were using a projector in a meeting room.

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, it would be at least two times faster to submit a report after meetings outside due to the optional keyboard. Luckily, one of my friends is working in

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tablet company, and he is offering an exclusive B2B price for us. If you consider purchasing

this

item, please let me know. I would be more than happy to help you. Yours sincerely, Jun

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
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6 paragraphs

182 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

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