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Group or team activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities which are done alone. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people believe that they could learn more useful
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 from teamwork rather than working individually.
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 working independently has some benefits, in my perspective, I
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 agree with the point of view.
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 essay will discuss both sides of the view with some examples. On the one hand, there are some advantages when working independently.
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, completing a task on your own
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helps
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 improve self-motivate
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.
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, when you do a thesis, by doing
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, you often get
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. So you must find alternative approaches to renew your inspiration.
This
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 way helps you complete the project and train your
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 ability. When working individually, you must choose which direction your project goes and have your responsibility for that because no person can go with you.
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, despite some benefits above, the partnership brings
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 more
skills
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 back to you. Because working in a
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,
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and interacting
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 with one or more of your coworkers leads you to improve other important
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. Working in a group means that
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 members must give and receive information from others. So to get the job done well, they must have unity
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 as active listening, brainstorming, and empathy.
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, to perform well and not be eliminated from a
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 you need more
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 than working alone. In conclusion, working individually and in harmony
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teach
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teaches
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 a lot of capabilities. But because working in a
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 needs more interaction between members
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they are trained
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skills
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 than another one.

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relevant specific examples
To improve your essay, it's important to provide more specific and detailed examples that clearly illustrate your points. This will strengthen your argument and make your essay more convincing.
supported main points
Try to elaborate more on the advantages of working independently. Offering more supporting details for both sides of the argument will enhance the depth of your analysis.
general grammar
Pay attention to grammar and vocabulary accuracy to ensure that your ideas are clearly conveyed. While small mistakes are acceptable, maintaining grammatical accuracy will improve readability.
logical structure
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This helps in presenting your argument in an organized manner.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction effectively outlines both sides of the argument and states your opinion, which provides a clear direction for the essay.
complete response
The essay addresses the task prompt appropriately by discussing both independent work and teamwork, which showcases an understanding of the topic.
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