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Nowadays, some workplaces tend to employ equal numbers of men and women workers. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Gender equality has become a debatable concern in society.Many multinational companies are in favour of hiring an equal number of males and girls and giving both the sexes equal opportunities to grow.The following essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 practice. To commence with, it is believed that men should work and earn for the family and women should be responsible for the household work.
Therefore
, if the ladies are given the chance their attention will be diverted from their kids and husband and they will only focus on their careers.Lack of communication in a house can lead to family disputes and even a divorce between a married couple.
Moreover
,
this
 can lead to a scarcity of jobs.
For example
, in countries like India where more than 65% of people are unemployed, if females will be hired educated and talented men will not be able to use their skills
thus
 leaving them jobless.
Furthermore
, the same count of both the genders in the office can help in abolishing the discrimination in the society.For an instance, there are several under-developed areas in the world where a girl is not allowed to go to school and study but boys are given every freedom to do anything of their own choice.
This
 phenomenon will aware people that both sexes must be treated equally and girls will be given the chance to explore.
In addition
 to
this
, working in the same environment can make males and females understand each other and can make females bold and fearless that they can speak for their rights. Overall, since the merits outweigh the demerits
hence
, businesses should try to make a balance between the genders.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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