Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today ‘s world subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

In figure 4, when there is an absence of
lignocaine
on the sciatic
nerve
of Bufo Marinus, the
CAP
is 8.9mV, which is the maximum peak
CAP
. The reason is that all axons will be stimulated to produce the peak
CAP
. At 0.25 minutes, the
CAP
slightly
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reduced to 8.5mV as the
lignocaine
is just applied. After
lignocaine
is applied to the sciatic
nerve
of Bufo Marinus for 6 minutes, the
CAP
decreased gradually from 8.9mV to 6mV. The anaesthetic
stop
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the action potential by blocking
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voltage
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gated Na+ channel. Repolarisation cannot
be occurred
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as the Na+ channel cannot change from inactivated to close(Lluka.L, 2022). The
lignocaine
blocks the stimulus and
less
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and
less
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fewer axons
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axon
can be activated.
As a result
, the longer the sciatic
nerve
is applied with
lignocaine
, the
axon
activity will be lower. Multiple sclerosis (
MS
) is a disease when the
myelin
sheaths harden and deteriorate.
Myelin
sheaths
insulates
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the
axon
membrane so the conduction speed is faster. Loss of insulation causes disruption of
action
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potential along axons. Voltage-gated sodium channels cannot depolarize to
threshold
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at
next
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node(Campbell Biology). High temperature reduces neuron conductivity, and
MS
may reduce
motor
function,
vision
loss, cognitive dysfunction and cause fatigue (Marisa P., et al., 2021). While decreasing
body
temperature
result
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in a distinct reduction of fatigue and increase
motor
function (T. Henze, 2006). Lower temperature can increase neuron conductivity and speed up
nerve
transmission,
this
can increase the rate of action potential and
it
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can improve
MS
patient’s
motor
and
vision
functions. Multiple sclerosis (
MS
) is a disabling disease of the
brain
and the central nervous system. It is caused by the damage of
myelin
sheaths, it is a protective insulation coating
layer
around the
axon
which can fasten the conduction of
message
of our
body
.
Axon
is a
cable like
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structure for transporting electrical impulses to the
body
in order to produce different
motions
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. The damage
of
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the protective
layer
is mainly caused by genetic, environmental factors and virus infection. The immune system attacks the protective
layer
so the
axon
is exposed the
message
send
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between the
brain
and
body
is very slow and may even be disrupted or blocked. So there is a communication difficulty between the
brain
and the
body
as our
brain
is not able to send
accurate
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signal
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to the
body
, patients may
also
be
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as
body
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will need extra energy to pass messages through the damaged neuron. It may
also
lead to
motor
and
vision
problem
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problems
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such
as
vision
loss,
hearing
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and hearing
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problem
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(Marisa P., et al., 2021).
For instance
, patients may have difficulties in performing movements of their hands, the reason is that when the
brain
send
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a
message
to the arm to control the arm muscle to move, the
message
cannot
transported
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accurately or it is blocked as the protective
layer
myelin
sheath is broken.
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