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More and more people today are moving away from where their friends and family live. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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nowwdays
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nowadays
,a lot of
people
 live far from their family and
firends
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friends
.I believe that
drawbacks
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 of
this
 way can be more than its benefits.From my perspective,living alone have a lot of bad
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things
 that we can not compensate for the damage done to our lives.
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i
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 think
people
 get more independence. One of the bad points about
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 from their family can be sickness.Some individuals can not accept alone for a long time and
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they
the
 become weak.So,they get illnesses like depression and they do not happy like before.
Therefore
,
this
 problem is very bad for their life.
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Despite
 some
people
,when they have
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 conditions they got more strong than before. Another
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 of
far
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 from their family and
firends
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friends
is
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 that they forget space
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like
life
 family due to the fact that most of the time, they are alone.
In addition
, maybe they do not have successful
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marriage
 because they have law age and are far from their parents and they can not use their experiences.
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,
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 think they become antisocial because they do not have
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 space family.Despite the fact that
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they get
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familiar
 new
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culture
 and improve their social.
However
,one of the pros
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is
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 discussed
about
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independence.When
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the
they
that
 are alone,they
learn
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 do
every
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 their work and they get new skills.So,
i
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I
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 think
this
 is good for their life. To sum up,
i
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 believe that living alone is not good
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for
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far
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 all
people
 because some
people
 are not strong in terms of
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moral and
 they are dependent
with
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 their parents,
firends
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friends
 and their living environment.So,they can not accept a lot of changes in their life and after some years they face more problems.personally,bad points
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outweigh
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 good points.
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