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Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the countryside. Do you agree or dis agree?

#people #traffic #transportation #cities #suburbs #countryside #dis
Large
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A large
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 number of the population live in the
cities
 rather than in the
countryside
. It depicts
large
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a large
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 proportion of
population
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the population
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 inclined towards
cities
, ultimately impacting
traffic
 and
transportation
problems
 in
cities
.
This
 essay will discuss, pupil's
two sided
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perception
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over
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this
 topic, but according to me, I disagree with the opinion of those who think that in order to solve the
traffic
 and the
transportation
problems
, people should be encouraged to live in the
citites
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cities
 rather than in the suburbs or in the
countryside
. To commence with, less number of
habitants
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habitats
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 stay in the
countryside
 indicating less
traffic
.
Moreover
, the
transportation
 problem is because of lack of
well maintained
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well-maintained
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 transport roads,
hence
, causing transport
problems
 in the outskirt areas.
Furthermore
, if the
countryside
 pupil
shift
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 to the
cities
, there would be a surge
of
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in
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 the population in
cities
 which cause more
traffic
problem
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problems
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 rather than
to pacify
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. To sum up, the government should take care of implementing transport lines that connect two terminals, between the
cities
 and the
countrysides
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countryside
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 to alleviate the
transportation
 and the
traffic
problems
. people should be encouraged to use public vehicles
instead
 of
own
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their own
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 vehicles leading to reduce
traffic
 and
transportation
 issues.
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