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With a great variety of social networking websites, people often add complete strangers to their friend lists. Do you think that this tendency helps people to find new friends or is it just a mean to increase their self-esteem? Justify your opinion with relevant examples.

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The line graph illustrates the average amount of
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 made on
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cell
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phones
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 and the residential
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services
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 in the period of ten years from 2001 to 2010. The units are measured in dollars. Overall, the average
expenditure
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 made on residential
phones
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 is outnumbered by the
cell
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phone
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services
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 after the initial six years, resulting in more users for
cell
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phones
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 compared to landline
phones
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. The amount spent on residential
phones
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 was around 700 in the year 2001 with a gradual decline from 2001 to 2006 from $700 to around $550, it reached the breakeven point with a cellphone. Later, the
expenditure
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 fell to the lowest number of $400 by the end of 2010. In regards to
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,
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 at the beginning of the year 2001 the
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 on cellphones was as low as $200 compared to a residential
phone
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, which was more than 50% of the
expenditure
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 made on
cell
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phone
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services
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 during that period,
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 with a rising demand of the cellphone
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 the cost rose sharply from $200 to 700$ within the period of 10 years.
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