You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter • Explain why you would like the job • Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ • Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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letter to express my enthusiasm to join your family and take good care of your kid. I have some justifications to choose

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job. The

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point is that I am an extrovert person and very friendly with children. As I

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have one boy who is 10

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by taking care of him. Another ground is that

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I usually do research and read books about handling

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babies and teenagers in every way. If you are looking for a

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with certification and experience, I am

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course from Canadian University and completed my internship with

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nursing home.

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to spend my free time in Australia. As I am a part-time photographer, I will roam around

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the city to click photographs for my blog writing and approach local magazines. Thanks in advance for your kind consideration. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Sincerely yours, Sana

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

166 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment

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