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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are some companies that still believe in the impact of dressing
style
 on people's performance while others think that the most important is how appropriately they
work
.
This
 essay will analyse both perspectives as well as the reason why I consider the knowledge and quality of
work
 overweight appearance in any organization.
Although
 the
clothes
 that people wear give an idea about personality or feelings, it does not have an impact on their activities but it is part of their identity.
for example
, some of those that we see on the supermarket line buying groceries with their comfortable sports
clothes
 sometimes are the most successful researchers or doctors and the matter that they are not in their smart dress does not mean their knowledge is decreasing. Oppositely, when someone is judged for their
style
 and pressed by their employer to wear different
clothes
 it more possibly will reduce motivation and affect their
work
 responsibilities because someone feeling uncomfortable does not
work
 at their best.
On the other hand
, it is lucid that our society still believes in people by the
first
 impression and when a job requires meetings, business or customer service, how the person looks is essential.
For instance
, the probabilities of giving a complex case to a lawyer who dresses in shorts and jerseys are fewer than the ones for someone with a suit.
Besides
, some studies
also
 say that the
clothes
 that we wear generate a respective behaviour,
hence
, when a smart
style
 is present in a company its employers will unconsciously tend to maintain appropriate performance. To conclude, I totally disagree with the idea that employers should control even the
style
 that their staff have, the
clothes
 that they like do not change individuals' skills or abilities and despite our communities still have bias related to the appearance, the way to transform
this
 is to stop making of the smart dressing a
work
 requirement.
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