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More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the 21st-century,century
people
 are moving from one nation to another. Some p6 believe that rich
countries
 are stealing professionals from poor
countries
 and the rest of the
people
 trust natural movement. I agree that many developed
countries
 are enhancing their business by inviting
people
 from underdeveloped areas. The
first
 and the foremost reason for changing the workplace is pay wages settled down by governments of top developed
countries
. Doctors, teachers and other professionals are moving to developed nations to earn money.
For example
 in the year 2019, around 5000
people
 from Bangladesh moved to Italy to enhance their business in the doctor's line. ,
Moreover
 studies in many
countries
such
 as Germany and England are free for children and have minimal fees for higher
education
 and are affordable for every Individual.
in addition
 advancement of technology and practical knowledge in every field contributed more to
this
 movement. Ongoing with another top reason for leaving home town
that is
 lack of
education
 system,less practical knowledge and more theoretical base classes. Excessive fee structure and ancient times pieces of equipment and ideas of study all are the key factors of not living in the home place.
Furthermore
 is a High living standard and worth of work in every field and at every step. To recapitulate, deprived
people
 are away from amenities and
education
 due to the non-availability of an
education
 system illiteracy rate and worst condition of living standards.
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