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Some people think that government funding for schools should be spent on science subjects rather than on other subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Without a doubt, with advanced technology, governments make an effort on establishing
science
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 schools or focusing on
science
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subjects
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. Whereas some people contend that
government
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 funding ought to be distributed to
science
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subjects
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, I am holding an opposite opinion toward
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 statement, and the reasons will be thoroughly elaborated on as follows.
Science
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subjects
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 should not be spent more funding than other
subjects
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 because not all
students
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 like
science
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subjects
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.
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, once the
government
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 merely funds
science
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subjects
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,
students
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 who prefer other
subjects
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 cannot benefit from
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 policy. Take Taiwan
for example
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. Recently, the
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 has allocated large amounts of funding to semiconductor-related academics since they are the leading industry to bring prosperity to Taiwan;
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, it is pretty unfair to
students
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 who prefer arts-related
subjects
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. They cannot use that funding on their learning even though they pay the tuition fees or taxes. Due to concentrating on
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subjects
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, the imbalance of talents is another issue that should be concerned. To be more specific, because the
government
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 is focusing on a single subject, other
subjects
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' talents would lose a chance and gain enough funding for learning, so a country’s industry will overly focus on a single industry. Take me as an example. Owing to studying a music-related subject which belongs to art
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, I deeply feel that the
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 provides no funding for my subject.
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, my friends major in
science
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subjects
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 which governments provide large amounts of resources for
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 as providing advanced machines and hiring excellent teachers to teach
students
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; relatively, other
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 do not have
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 enough funding and good resources. In conclusion, based on the aforementioned, even though some people think cultivating talented people in
science
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subjects
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 is the best way for the country due to personal preferences and the imbalance of talents.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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