You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You and some friends want to start a weekly dance club and you have found a hall that would be suitable to hold your meetings. Write a letter to the owner of the hall. In you letter, 1. explain your and your friends project 2. ask if it possible to rent the hall and under the what terms 3. state what day and what timings you would like to use the hall You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
letter to raise our interest regarding one of your halls that I found
on
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a newspaper.
First
of all, let me introduce
about
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our project and notion. As we are big fans of dance and music, we would like to work
a
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business that
related
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to our hobby.
That is
one of the reasons why we would like to get your hall to open a dance club.
Although
we have been looking
a
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suitable room with some specifications for months, we could not find anything else.
However
, we were luckily found that your room met all of our required facts. I was wondering if you could rent your hall with a year lease.
Moreover
, do not worry about the terms, we are pleased to offer the same as your requested amount. If you do not mind, we want to look and check around the actual condition of the room
first
before signing. If it is in
a
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perfect condition, we would
like
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use your hall
start
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from the
first
day of April. Yours faithfully, Tun Naung Win
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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