Task 1 You want to arrange a conference for your company, and you need to ask one of your colleagues to give a presentation in this conference. Write a letter to your colleague. In your letter include: Details about the conference Why you want your colleague to give presentation What arrangement will you do for this conference

Dear Julie , Hope
this
letter finds you well! Indeed , I’m writing
this
letter to request you to present a small talk at the Employment conference which is going to be held at Summit Hotel on coming weekends. Hundreds of prestigious companies will join us in order to know about the updated labour law. On the
first
day ,
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new rules and income tax will be discussed thoroughly. On the
next
day , the trend and situation of the current employment market will be presented. When the boss asks me to find someone who has in-depth knowledge in that field , the
first
person that comes to my mind is you, Julie . Being an international HR manager, I believe , you can share precious knowledge and worldwide experiences.
Likewise
, I am going to take
a
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main facilitator role at that conference. Regarding SSB rules , I will
also
give
1-hour
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talk , and I am searching the relevant data on the internet at the moment. I’m excited to meet you and looking forward to your confirmation. Warm wishes, Mee Mee
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