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Last Wednesday you flew from London to Vancouver. When you arrived home, you discovered that you had left your hand luggage on the plane. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter, you should explain: where and when you lost your bag what your bag looks like what its contents were

#wednesday #london #vancouver #home #hand #luggage #plane #airline #bag #contents
Dear Sir I am writing
this
 letter
regarding
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to
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inquire about my hand luggage which I lost on the plane when I was
traveling
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 from London to Vancouver. Two days before I came back to Vancouver from London. I booked a ticket
of
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 your airline and my Ticket number is BK23456. I just kept
handbag
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my handbag
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 along with me while
other
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 luggage is in the luggage compartment. When I reached home , I found that I lost my handbag. I hope you would definitely help me. My bag is small but spacious. It has
red
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a red
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in color
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color
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 with black elastic strips. It has
outer
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an outer
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 pocket with
zipper
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a zipper
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 and a logo of
it's
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 company(Nike)
at
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 the front.
This
 bag is really important to me as it has my wallet as well as my returning ticket. Some of my documents are in it. I hope you would definitely bring your notice towards
this
 matter. I can do whatsoever you would say to follow. Looking forward
for
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 your earliest reply. Thanking you in anticipation Yours faithfully Navdeep
kaur
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If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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