You have seen an advertisement in an Australian Magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter Why would you like the job Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear sir My name is Navdeep. I have seen your advertisement regarding

care

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the care

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of your 6 years old

child

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in an Australian magazine. I would like to be considered for

this

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job

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and I assure you that I will take proper care of your

child

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. I recently come to Australia from my

Homecountry

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at the invitation of my uncle to live with him for one year. So I am free to do any

job

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. I would like to

take

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this

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work as

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am I

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really fond of children and their way of solving problems. I have

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apply

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one year experience of working in a

Child

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Health Clinic and I

also

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did

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job

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a job

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creche

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Moreover

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I have my younger brother which is 7 years old so it would be easy for me to look after your

child

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. I would like to spend my free time

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apply

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visiting Australia's monuments. My one school friend is

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in Australia. I'm planning to meet him. I hope you would give me a chance to take

this

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job

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and would be satisfied

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my work. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully Navdeep

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

190 words

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The Greeting

There are a growing demand for fresh water nowadays and this is becoming a global problem. What are the causes and solutions.

Some people believe that exams are an unappropriate way of measuring students performance and should be replaced by continuous assessments. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that technology is now an invaluable study tool for young people. Others, however, believe that it is harmful for the studying process. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification.

most employers do job interviews before offering a position to a person. do you think this is the best wsy to do it, or are there better alternatives? what is the best method of choosing employees in your opinion?

Some people think that technology is now an invaluable study tool for young people. Others, however, believe that it is harmful for the studying process. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.