You have seen an advertisement in an Australian Magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter Why would you like the job Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear sir My name is Navdeep. I have seen your advertisement regarding

care

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of your 6 years old

child

in an Australian magazine. I would like to be considered for

this

job

and I assure you that I will take proper care of your

child

. I recently come to Australia from my

Homecountry

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at the invitation of my uncle to live with him for one year. So I am free to do any

job

. I would like to

take

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this

work as

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really fond of children and their way of solving problems. I have

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apply

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one year experience of working in a

Child

Health Clinic and I

also

did

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creche

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Moreover

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I have my younger brother which is 7 years old so it would be easy for me to look after your

child

. I would like to spend my free time

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apply

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visiting Australia's monuments. My one school friend is

also

in Australia. I'm planning to meet him. I hope you would give me a chance to take

this

job

and would be satisfied

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my work. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully Navdeep

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Submitted by navdeepkaur61906 on Sat May 07 2022

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The Greeting

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Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

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Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Grammar mistakes
 

9 paragraphs

190 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

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