The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The percentage of
people
in a country who owned electronic gadgets and the
number
of hours they had been using
it
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between 1920 and 2019 are depicted in the graphs below. A glance will reveal the fact that the amount of time that has been put
in
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into
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using electronic devices
have
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has
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decreased despite the
raise
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rise
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in the
number
of owners of refrigerators, washing machines and vacuum cleaners. In 1920 the
number
40
percent
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per cent
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of the
people
owned a washing machine when almost no one had a refrigerator. But the percentage rose for both groups,
while
the rise in the
percent
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of
people
was small
,
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about 30
percent
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, it grew sharply to 90
percent
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per cent
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in 40 years. From 1960 to 1980 the trend changed. By 1980, the trend changed for the washing machine and the rise gave way to a fall of almost ten
percent
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which was followed by a gradual rise that did not surpass about 75
percent
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till 2019.
On The other hand
, the
number
of
people
with a refrigerator reached its peak of 100
percent
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slightly and remained stable till 2019. The percentage of
people
with a vacuum cleaner, which had risen 70
percent
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steadily in 80 years, meets the line of
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the refrigerator
a refrigerator
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
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in 2000 and follows the same pattern afterwards. Despite the growing trend in all these three appliances, the
number
of hours each family uses
the
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electronic gadgets went down during
this
time.
Although
the change is radical in the first 40 years it follows a small decrease till 2019.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, number, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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