These days, more and more people move away from the area where they were born and brought up when they become adults. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays,
people
like exploring different
cities
and cultures, and
this
trend is becoming increasingly popular among young
people
, especially in recent past years.
Although
, moving to different
cities
, leaving the birthplace does more harm than good or vice-versa is a debatable topic.
This
essay will discuss the benefits of moving away from the hometown and will argue why moving to new places have several favourable elements that deserve attention. Admittedly it is true, that most
of
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the
people
, especially students, move to big
cities
or countries when they apply for
a
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higher education.
For example
, for the students living in remote areas or small
town
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with
limited
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scope of education, apply
for
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the Universities in the big
cities
.
Second
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significant reason is, that some
people
love exploring different places and cultures.
For example
, As per the recent research, 40% of the American students studying religion
were so impresses
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by the rich Indian culture that they migrated to the holy places of
india
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • migration
  • globalization
  • socio-economic factors
  • traditional norms
  • cosmopolitan environment
  • brain drain
  • assimilation
  • gentrification
  • alienation
  • multiculturalism
  • infrastructure strain
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