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Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter: • suggest how you could help her in her home • say why you would like to do this work • explain when you will and will not be available Begin your letter as follows: Dear …………….,

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Dear
Mrs.
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 Barrett, I am writing to you since I have seen your advertising on our town news board. I am interested in
this
 job and I will be appreciated
if
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it if
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 you would like to hire me for
next
 summer. I have experience doing garden
work
 and I would say that I am very good
about
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 it. I have taken
gardening
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a gardening
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 course
therefore
, you can trust my
work
 skills.
This
work
 will be a great profile for me because I am
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planning
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planing
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 to apply for
an
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apply
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advanced garden
work
in
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the
next
 spring. My available time will be every weekend
of
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 May to August. Please contact me via my telephone number if you have any questions or
inquiry
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. Best Regards, Rawisara
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Domestic chores
  • Culinary skills
  • Horticulture
  • Cultural immersion
  • Work ethic
  • Flexible schedule
  • Time management
  • Prior commitments
  • Punctuality
  • Reliability
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