Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter: • suggest how you could help her in her home • say why you would like to do this work • explain when you will and will not be available Begin your letter as follows: Dear …………….,

Dear
Mrs.
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Mrs

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Barrett, I am writing to you since I have seen your advertising on our town news board. I am interested in
this
job and I will be appreciated
if
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you would like to hire me for
next
summer. I have experience doing garden
work
and I would say that I am very good
about
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at

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it. I have taken
gardening
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a gardening

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course
therefore
, you can trust my
work
skills.
This
work
will be a great profile for me because I am
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planning

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planing
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planning

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to apply for
an
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apply

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advanced garden
work
in
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apply

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the
next
spring. My available time will be every weekend
of
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from

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May to August. Please contact me via my telephone number if you have any questions or
inquiry
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inquiries

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. Best Regards, Rawisara
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