In many countries, an increasing crime has been blamed on violent images on television and in Computer and video games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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television and computer bring convenience and knowledge, they may bring disadvantages at the same time. Recently, a discussion has aroused wide concern. Some think that violent image

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advanced techniques is the key to increasing

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. Personally speaking, I partially agree with

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only and here are my reasons. On the

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hand, it is no doubt that violence is promoted via television or computer.

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, lots of TV dramas which are related to murder, rape, or illegal trading have been released recently.

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, it has not been announced that these are only allowed for those above 18. As teens are pristine and as pure as a white paper, without good

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and teaching, they may misfollow the wrong behaviours in the programmes.

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attributes to the increase in

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, is that mean electrical techniques have the main role? It is definitely a 'no'. Education may play a more critical role. As mentioned previously, teenagers are pure and can easily be mistaught.

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, the teacher and parents

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have an important role in preventing

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, when we are having history lessons about killing people in the ancient century, it is a must for us to mention the illegality.

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, the penalty for committing crimes should

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be taught as a reminder. So,

crime

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can be prevented and decreased. In conclusion, I partially agree

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the issue as not only do techniques spread violence and

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in an increase in

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education attributes to

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