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Fewer students are studying science at school and university, favouring more computer based subjects instead. Is this a positive or negative development? What are the reasons for this?

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As technology dominates the world, more and more college students choose computer-related
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 as their majors
instead
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 of
science
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. Some people start to worry about the impacts of
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 trend. In my opinion, as a
science
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 bachelor, I take a strongly negative view against the popularity of computer-based departments.
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 of all,
science
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 is the basis of every theory. Students in
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 school not only are trained in logical thinking, but
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 acquire the theory of fundamental methodology. Those capabilities can be applied to varied fields.
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, majoring in computer-based
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 is about how to utilize a tool, yet understanding
science
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 affects what you think.
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 has an impact on people’s mindsets
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 of skill sets.
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 a computer-based degree can probably earn you more job opportunities at
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, what if the computer knowledge you acquired in school isn’t scarce anymore after graduating, the skill set would become useless and can’t catch the trend
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 but not least, no matter what technology it is, the root of the technology is
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. Take one technological application computer as an example, a computer is a combination of math, physics and psychology. Three of them are the departments in a
science
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 school.
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, algorithms are the derivations of math, and the user-interface designs are based on psychology. In conclusion, in the short term, computer-related
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 can make a living. In the long term, the benefits of
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 outweigh computer-based
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, because learning systematic thinking will not be out of date, as machinery advances.
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, computers could fall into disuse in decades.
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