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Some people think that it is a waste of money for countries to host big sporting events like the world cup, and that the money would be better spent on other things. However, others think that hosting large sporting events has a clear, positive impact on a country. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Road
 access to the
city
 hospital had changed a lot from 2000 to 3000. More roads were established after 2000 due to the
develpment
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development
 of
traffic
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 system. As well, the area of
car
park
 grew as well. In 2000, there was a Ring
Road
 around the
city
 hospital. Directly to the
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souther
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 part of
hospital
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the hospital
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 was Hospital
Road
. Along the hospital
road
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 there were several bus
stop
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stops
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. And
in
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 the east
side
 of hospital
road
, there was a
car
park
 for staff and
public
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, which had a gate in North. The hospital
road
 was vertically crossed by the
city
road
. In 2000, the three
rodads
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roads
rods
 were still there. But there were two new roundabouts sitting at the crosses of
ring
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road
 and hospital
road
,
city
road
 and hospital
road
 respectively. The bust stops along hospital
road
 had been turned
in to
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into
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 a bus station
in
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 the west
side
 of
hispital
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hospital
road
. The
car
park
in
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 the east
side
 of
hospital
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the hospital
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 was set only for staff, while there expended a
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park
 for
public
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 on the other
side
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ring
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the ring
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road
in
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east
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 of
city
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the city
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 hospital. The gate of
public
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the public
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car
park
 is
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west
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