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The figures give information about economic growth and household expenditure across a range of categories. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparsions where relevant.

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Figure 1 shows the percentage change in the amount of
credit
 available and
taxation
 between 1990 and 2020. The
second
 figure shows the percentage increase in expenditure on three different types of products at five-year intervals between 2000 and 2020. Seen together, the two figures suggest that there is a positive correlation between the availability of
credit
 and levels of
consumer
 spending. The amount of
credit
 available reached a peak in 2005
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 when nearly 60% more
credit
 was available than in 1990, and another high point in 2020. Spending on all three categories of expenditure (food, entertainment and clothing)
also
 reached high points at approximately the same time
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On the other hand
, the level of
consumer
 spending appears to be inversely proportional to the rate of
taxation
. When
taxation
 fell sharply in the periods leading up to 2005,
consumer
 spending appeared to increase sharply.
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 similar pattern is evident in the period between 2008 and 2020. Overall, greater availability of
credit
 appears to act as a stimulus to
consumer
 spending, whereas higher
taxation
 may have the opposite effect.
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