Many elderly people are no long looked after by their families but are put in care homes or nursing homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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t is true that nowadays an increasing number of oldsters are not under
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care of their close people but live in
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homes or in the special medical centres created for them. There
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of positive and negative sides
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change in the modern world. On the one hand, today the community notices several beneficial consequences of
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always monitored.
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lives there and has
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permanent access to professionally educated doctors and nurses, who could help him any time of the day.
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heart disease and feels bad he could be delivered to the operation room which is a
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from his accommodation very fastly. The
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beneficial side for society is that workers who have retired parents are working more efficiently and are able to afford
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to relax after a tough day.
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time for
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for those whose work requires a great deal of physical labour.
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whose parents are in
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of places can face some kinds of mental problems. There is no doubt that people who used to live in a family move out to these institutions they usually feel
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lonely.
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mental health and can bring a number of unwilling
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have recorded an occasion in a particular retirement home
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that region when one of the residents very strongly missed his daughter and eventually faced dementia. In conclusion, while there are some plus points of having a free time after work and having a professional treatment if the relationship between child and parent will end after the retirement too much will be lost.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional care
  • Medical attention
  • Trained staff
  • Social interaction
  • Combat loneliness
  • Safety and security
  • Relief for families
  • Loss of autonomy
  • Emotional impact
  • Cost
  • Financial strain
  • Quality of care
  • Neglect and abuse
  • Detachment from family
  • Mental wellbeing
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