In some places, old age is valued, while in other cultures youth is considered more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is often argued that senior citizens of the
society
has
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many
benfits
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benefits
to
new
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generation and
country
.
Although
old
people
may be considered
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as
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burden
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to
the
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society
, they play
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role in
shape
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the young
population
. In
this
essay, why old
people
are valued in one
society
while
youth
in other cultures, will be discussed.
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on
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,
senior
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citizen of the
society
has myriads of advantages while living
in
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society
. In countries like
India
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elders are
most
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regarded generation of the
society
as they have experience as well as knowledge. They could impart their lifetime achievement to
coming
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generation
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generations
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and teach them how to fight
obstacle
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obstacles
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of life.
For example
,
the
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study by
the
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Queen's University has found that families living with their grandparents
has
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eighty
percent
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less
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financial problems.
Therefore
,
people
after retirement provides
a
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molar support as well as act as a caretaker
of
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for
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younger
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the younger
a younger
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population
.
Hence
, grandparents assist families by binding them in
tough
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a tough
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time
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times
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and
provide
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support in
handing
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handling
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daily chaos.
On the other hand
, in many countries
youth
is appreciated most among the other age group of the
society
. Adults are the main workforce of the
country
and contribute to
the
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society
the most. They do not put
burden
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the burden
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on
the
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society
in the terms of medical
instead
they repay the
country
in the form of taxes.
For example
, the Times Now has reported that India has
sevety
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seventy
percent
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of taxpayers
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in the age bracket of twenty to fifty.
Society
appreciate
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appreciates
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the
middle aged
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middle-aged
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population
of the
country
because they
the
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main
contributer
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contributor
in
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uplifting the economy.
Therefore
, societies
recieved
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received
high
return
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returns
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from
youth
and
lowest
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the lowest
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form
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from
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senior citizens. In conclusion, it is common practice in most
of
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the highly populated counties to appreciate
youth
more than older
people
.
Young
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population
is the real workforce of the nation.
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