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some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. what is your opinion about this?

#people #home #workplace #place
Some people believe that being tidy is very important.
However
, others believe that
This
 fact is not important at all. In my opinion, being well organised and keeping our workplace and home tidy is necessary. There are so many reasons why we should not be messy. I may say that the most important
one
 for it would be gaining
time
. If we find whatever we want easily and fast, we should be organised and tidy .
Thus
, we would not waste
time
 finding the stuff that we look for. it might be something in our house or in the workplace or even on our computer. If we put the stuff where we should
place
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, we would get them in a blink of an eye. Other than that it would be
time
-consuming. Life is
being
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complicated
day
 by
day
 and there are so many things for us to take care of. That pressure causes so much stress for us and if we are tidy enough to sort the things out in
one
, it would reduce our stress. As an example, if we are the
one
 who does the
school
 run for our kids and we are
also
 the
one
 who organised the clothes and breakfast the
day
 before
school
day
 for our kids,
school
day
 morning would not turn up
a
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chaos. Because we would know that, these errands were all ready and we would not need extra
time
 to get to
school
 on
time
.
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 these reasons above, we should consider that workplace or house
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 not matter, where we should keep things clean and tidy and organised, not to waste
time
 or
to
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be
stresfull
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stressful
 to find them out.
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  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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