Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The given bar chart illustrates data about the percentage of visiting activities
such
as
zoo
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,
library
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,
theatre
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theatres
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and cinemas by different groups of
people
such
as
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in Australia (1), new
migrants
born in English-speaking
countries
(2) and new
migrants
born in other
countries
(3). Overall,
cinema
is the most popular place for
people
almost from all categories while the less popular is
theatre
Also
, it can be seen that zoos and libraries have almost the same statistics. According to the given information, the
first
group is more interested in
cinema
(70%) when
zoo
and
library
are visited by about 40% of visitors.
Besides
, there is
theatre
which is not so popular and takes only 20% of
people
who are born in Australia.
In addition
, new
migrants
born in
countries
where English is the native language prefer to go to the
cinema
( more than 60%).
However
, 50% of them are interested in
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the zoo
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and 40% in visiting the
library
.
Also
the
second
category of
people
like
theatre
and it takes about 25%. If we talk about the
third
category, it can be seen that more than 50% of these
migrants
go to the
library
and 50% prefer to visit the
cinema
.
Moreover
,
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a nation
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nation
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nations
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who were born in other
countries
visit the
zoo
(35%) and
theatre
(10%)
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • loyalty
  • seniority
  • job satisfaction
  • rapidly changing job market
  • adapt to
  • work culture
  • career progression
  • network
  • diversity of experience
  • adaptability
  • career aspirations
  • dynamic nature
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