You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter •say how you feel about his performance •give details of your musical activities •explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

Dear Melvin, How are you doing? I hope you are doing great! I've been to
Raymond
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Lam
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concert
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night with my friend, he is my favourite singer
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since

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sine
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since

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I was still
studing
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studying

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in
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at

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University, do you
konow
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him? It was an
exellent
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excellent

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expirences
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experiences
experience

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, the lighting, sounds, locations and performances
of
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apply

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him
is
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are

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totally what I want
on
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in

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my musical
activities
! I can not wait to share
with
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it with

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you! The concert was running at night as usual at the
HongKong
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Hong Kong

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Sports Center. When I
first
got into the
center
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centre

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, each of the seats had
also
provided
a lighting sticks
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lighting sticks
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, which I think
it
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apply

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is
a
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apply

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really Eco-friendly, it can give the audience
an
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a

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good impression and help to save their money, so I would love to apply
this
in my
activites
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activities

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. I remember you are working in a concert production company, and have
this
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had this

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kind of
expirence
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experience

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for more than 10 years, you would be the best person for helping with my musical
activities
.I will need a
sound bar
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soundbar

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with
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microphone

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micophone
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a micophone

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and
also
20 lighting sticks for it. The
activities
will be running on 20 February, 8:30pm , and there will be around 20 audiences.Please let me know if you can help
for
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my
activities
, I wish I could share
this
memorbale
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memorable

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moment with you and meet up with you soon! Keep in touch! Thank you, Amy.
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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