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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties.

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It is true that going to other
countries
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 has been increasing. It seems clear that men go aboard for several reasons. Multiple
people
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 decided to go overseas to find a job or study. Living in other
countries
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 has some advantages.
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, it
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 has difficulties. It seems advantageous that living aboard can expand your understanding. Learning a new language to bring the
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 to make new friends and different cultures. It
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 develops your experience.
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, moving aboard can lead to
better
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 quality of life.
Quality
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 of life in each country is different. Many
people
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 living in developing
countries
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 want to transfer to developed
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 because they want to earn extra income.
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, there are a number of disadvantages of living in other
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 that
people
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 should take into consideration.
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 it is culture shock. Many
people
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 take a year to get used to the living environment.
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 often leads to homesickness and in some
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 it has a negative impact on health.
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, it is racism. Racism was pervasive all over the world. There is no sign that it is going to stop any time soon. The majority of
people
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,
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 black
people
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 living aboard , have said they experienced the same direct public racism. In
conclusion
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 starting life in foreign
countries
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 certain benefits, but it
negative
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has negative
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 consequences should not be overlooked.
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