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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties.

These days, more and more
people
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 are going to other
countries
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 for significant periods of time, either to
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find
 a job or to
study
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. There are clearly many benefits to doing
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, but
people
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 who live abroad can
also
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 face some difficulties. Going abroad to
study
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 or
work
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 brings great benefits to us. Studying abroad is the best way to learn a
language
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. There is nothing more effective than learning a
language
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 by living in the host
country
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.
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 you'll be surrounded by the
language
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 every day, conversing directly with native speakers, and developing your
language
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 skills.
In addition
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 to experiencing the culture of your
study
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 abroad destination, you will
also
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 have the opportunity to travel to other nearby
countries
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.
For example
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, if you go to a university in the UK, you can easily catch flights to European
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such
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 as France, Germany, Italy and many other attractive places. Another interesting thing is that while living abroad, you will be able to try new foods, listen to traditional music,
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 in local activities in the
country
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 of
study
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 abroad. Going to another
country
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 will help you meet new friends from all over the world, get to know
people
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 of all different cultures and learn about other
countries
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. The benefit of studying abroad is that you will experience the highest quality education that can keep up with the trends of the world.
Studying
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 abroad, you will have the opportunity to pursue disciplines and subjects that are not even taught at domestic universities,
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 your knowledge will be improved and you will have more job opportunities.
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, there are still many outstanding
problems
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 when going abroad to
study
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 and
work
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. The difference in time zones makes many
people
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 tired and sleepless when they
first
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 go abroad. Failure to do so will affect the results of
study
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 and
work
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. In Western
countries
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 or like Korea,
Japan
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and Japan
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, winters are often very cold, and there are even places with snowfall.
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 a place with a hot climate like Vietnam, many
people
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 will not be used to the cold weather, leading to easy health
problems
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. One of the most common
problems
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 when studying abroad is the
language
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 barrier. Maybe you've spent five years learning the
language
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, but when you move to a new
country
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, it seems completely foreign to you.
People
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 speak a local
language
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 that you are not familiar with, making it difficult for you to feel awkward in everyday life. Another difficulty that everyone encounters is that when you come to a new
country
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, you have to take care of yourself, calculate your expenses properly, and balance between
study
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 and
work
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. There will be no one beside you to encourage you to remind you when you are stressed.
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 you feel more homesick.
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 is a natural feeling whether it is your
first
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 time living alone or not.
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, the biggest difficulty that almost Vietnamese
people
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 often face when going abroad is financial
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.
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 in developed
countries
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 will drive up costs and many families do not have the funds to support will put pressure on students. In summary, living abroad offers new opportunities for a better future, but
also
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 challenges that we must do our best to overcome and make our dreams come true. It's really difficult, but in
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 you will have many opportunities to experience to help you grow and become stronger.

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