Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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individuals
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believe
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range of
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is crucial
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they do not appeal
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. Generally, I completely disagree with
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opinion and think that it is obviously impossible
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huge
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amount of wage with
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satisfaction.
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job
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the job
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without interest would cause becoming jobless.
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,
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someone
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about his
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, he would improve
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his
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.
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tolerate stress in his
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, will not
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to decide suitable in
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situation.
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, he does not like his
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indeed. Afterwards, he cannot tolerate
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of his work
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.
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, not only he will not develop himself
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work but
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he may lose his
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, he
however
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earns
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income.
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, someone who
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work might discourage
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job
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.
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, he is due to do his duty unsuitable and
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is always nagging. Because
,
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he thinks that he is not
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the right
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, a person who wants always to be
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a professional
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,
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is a truck driver
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, while he earns
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salary. So, he thinks about his dream and it might
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never satisfies his
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. In conclusion, I believe satisfaction is an important factor in
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the career
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life of people. Whereas, if people wanted to have
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life, choosing the correct and suitable
job
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would be a basic factor.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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