Some people believe that the most important aspect of their job is their salary. Others think that the job itself is the most important. What do you think is the most important aspect of a job? Include specific details and examples to support your choice

All most
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Most
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everyone has a
jobs
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job
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. We required a
job
for supporting us financially, or
make
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to make
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our life meaningful. Many have agreed that the salary is the most important aspect when came to
job
consideration.
However
, I disagree with
this
idea. I believe that there were more important factors when came to
jobs
decision
such
as
,
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apply
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job
security and benefits,
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and jobs
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jobs
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job
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satisfaction.
Therefore
this
passage will show the importance of
this
aspect.
Firstly
,
job
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regarding job
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security and benefits ,we require
too
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to
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evaluate the factors of
jobs
security as well when we decide
for
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on
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a
Correct the article-noun agreement
a job
jobs
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jobs
.
For example
, do
this
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these
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jobs
guarantee our long term association with the employer or
has
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have
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a
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apply
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compensation for employees when
it
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they
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need to terminate their contracts.
As a result
,
this
action will
decreased
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decrease
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the risk of employees losing their
jobs
and income.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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