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In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents’ home once they finish school. They start living on their own or sharing a house with friends. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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The line graph gives information about the difference between sales volume of various
kind
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 of fast food in Australia
from
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 teenagers, including from 1975 to 2000. As the data presented in
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 graph, teenagers enjoyed each kind of fast food were basically under 100
times
 all these 25 years. In detail, youngsters
were
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gradually love to have pizza and hamburgers, which were not popular in 1975(only no more than 10
times
 per year) and eventually reached
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almost 10
times
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 1995 and kept to the final. Teens prefer hamburgers to pizzas all over these 25 years.
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contrast
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, the consumption of fish and chips was
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 trend. Fish and chips are one of the most
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 fast foods among teens in 1975, which
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 for almost 10 years. And dropped to 40
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 per year by 2000. In summary, teenagers were more interested in fish and chips at
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 and
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 pizza and hamburgers occupied the market.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-reliance
  • financial responsibility
  • social isolation
  • housing demand
  • personal growth
  • financial strain
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making skills
  • disrupt
  • support networks
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