In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents’ home once they finish school. They start living on their own or sharing a house with friends. Is this a positive or a negative development?

The line graph gives information about the difference between sales volume of various
kind
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of fast food in Australia
from
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teenagers, including from 1975 to 2000. As the data presented in
this
graph, teenagers enjoyed each kind of fast food were basically under 100
times
all these 25 years. In detail, youngsters
were
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gradually love to have pizza and hamburgers, which were not popular in 1975(only no more than 10
times
per year) and eventually reached
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almost 10
times
from the beginning
at
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1995 and kept to the final. Teens prefer hamburgers to pizzas all over these 25 years.
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contrast
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, the consumption of fish and chips was
in
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contrary
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trend. Fish and chips are one of the most
favorite
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fast foods among teens in 1975, which
kept
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for almost 10 years. And dropped to 40
times
per year by 2000. In summary, teenagers were more interested in fish and chips at
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and
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pizza and hamburgers occupied the market.
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