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Studies suggest that the rise in the consumption of junk foods is the major cause of obesity. Some people argue that this problem can be tackled to a great extent by increasing the price of these food items. Do you agree or disagree?

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In many countries,
people
 prefer to eat fast
foods
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 as no need to wait much time for their hunger.
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 studies state that
increase
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 in taking fast
food
involve
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 in the main role to become overweight. Some
people
 think that to solve
this
 problem by increasing the
food
 prices. I agree with the latter statement and in
this
essay
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 I will discuss my points of view. To start with, everybody wants to fulfil their hungry stomach within
short
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 period.
This
 is the main cause to consume
the
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fast
food
 for
people
.
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For
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Fro
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For
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 example, to compare with the numbers of
people
 who are taking
foods
 from the normal
food
 stalls and who are from
Macdonald
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Macdonald's
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, the percentage of
people
 who like to eat
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at Macdonald
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Macdonald
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Macdonald's
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 is higher because of its taste and less time preparation. As a consequence,
the
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most
of
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apply
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people
 become getting fat and
increase
weight
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their weight
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.
On the other hand
, there are many ways to control obesity. The most significant method is to
increase
 the price of
foods
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food
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.
For instance
, the government authorities impose
the
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apply
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effective advocacy to participate in reducing
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overweight
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over weight
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overweight
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 and keeping records for
percentage
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the percentage
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 of obesity by means of
increase
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increasing
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 price methods. It should be
review
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reviewed
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this
 record for
better
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a better
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 improvement approach if
this
 method
is not get
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is not getting
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suitable
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a suitable
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result
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results
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. To sum up,
the
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junk
foods
 are satisfied for
the
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people
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people's
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 hunger
in
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for
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short
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 time
however
,
it
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they
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cause
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causes
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in
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them in
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 getting
weigh
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weight
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. Personally, if
increase
 the prices
for
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of
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 junk
foods
 can handle some amount of obesity rate. The
people
 who prefer
to
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fresh
food
 rather than fast
food
they
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apply
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will get
good
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a good
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result
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results
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 in their well-being.
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