some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
There are arguments, that we should adapt to a bad situation,
for
instance
unsatisfactory job or an insufficient amount of money. There is a disputeAdd the comma(s)
,instance
,
because others claim we should try to improve these unpleasant conditions. In my essay, I am going to discuss both these views and give my own opinion.
It can not be denied that not everything is going as we dreamed about it, including occupation and the amount of money we should live with. From one point of Remove the comma
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view
, we should at least to
attempt to accept these conditions, because Fix the infinitive
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otherwise
we may become greedy. In the eastern world, is thought, that doesn´t matter Add a comma
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what we have to deal with, it is all about our mindset statement. We have to learn how to tackle everyday issues and how to accept themChange preposition
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,
because it is what life brings to us and it is our life way we should come through. From Remove the comma
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this
point of view
, I agree we should find a way how to become happy in whatever circumstances,
because it improves our human features.
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On the other hand
, focusing on the nowadays western life generally described as mainstream, everyone is trying to put himself in a better position, not just in the work, including higher income, but broadly speaking in every aspect of his existence. From this
perception of view
, it is understandable, because the majority of us would like to have more money, a bigger house, two cars, holidays in the tropics and whatsoever else. If it is not achievable in the current occupation, we search happiness
elsewhere, until we succeed. Linked to Change preposition
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this
way of thinking I agree at least partially.
In a nutshell, from one point of view
we should try to adapt to present circumstances. Add a comma
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Nevertheless
, there are others who would always try to find better conditions for themselves and exactly this
might be a source of their happiness.Submitted by sevcik.karol on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite