Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples.
Earth
Environments situation has worsened since the period of Change noun form
Earth's
industrial
revolution. There were many activities that have damaged our ecosystem. Add an article
the industrial
However
, the most impactful was the unexpected increase
of greenhouse gases in our earth
atmosphere. Many methods were implemented but with limited success.Change noun form
earth's
However
I believe Add a comma
,However
thatwe
still have Correct your spelling
that we
that
a
answer for Change the article
an
this problems
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this problem
these problems
such
as inventing new
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a new
kind
of Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
energy
, regulations of automobiles, etc. As in
Change preposition
This
this
essay will exhibit the cause and the possible method of salvaging our environment
problem.
Replace the word
environmental
First
of all , The consequence of increasing greenhouse gases was the overall increase
in earth
temperatures. Therefore
, created serious problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems
such
as rising sea level
and damaging many Fix the agreement mistake
levels
organisms
Change noun form
organisms'
organism's
habitat
. Fix the agreement mistake
habitats
Firstly
the increase
in earth
temperature Change noun form
earth's
have
caused the ice glaciers around the Change the verb form
has
earth
to start melting. Hence
, raising up
the sea level. Because of that, many Change preposition
apply
Correct your spelling
coastal
costal
Correct your spelling
coastal
area
were destroyed. Change to a plural noun
areas
Secondly
, increase
in Correct article usage
an increase
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the earth
earth
temperature Change noun form
earth's
also
caused the organisms habitat
to Change to a genitive case
the organism's habitat
the habitat of the organism
altered
. Add a missing verb
be altered
For
example
drastic change in habitat temperature , Add a comma
,example
as a
result
risks many organisms going extinct.
Add the comma(s)
,result
Therefore
we need to find the
effective way for combating Correct article usage
an
environmental
Add an article
the environmental
problem
. Fix the agreement mistake
problems
Firstly
,Green energy
is a
Remove the article
apply
energy
many experts have agreed that it is a solution of
combating environmental problems. Change preposition
to
For instance
, green energy
were
not created any carbon emissions or toxic gases Change the verb form
was
into
our environment. Change preposition
in
In
addition
the process of harvesting Add a comma
,addition
this
kind of energy
doesn’t do much same
to Correct article usage
the same
it
surroundings as well. Change the pronoun
its
Thus
shifting our usage of our energy
towards green energy
will help ease the burden from
the environment. Change preposition
on
As a
result
will still be able to prevent Add a comma
,result
further
environmental deterioration. Secondly
, we have known how much carbon emissions gain from automobiles, As a result
making regulation of automobiles very
crucial. Add a missing verb
is very
However
Add a comma
,However
straight up
banning or limiting the usage of cars Add a hyphen
straight-up
Correct your spelling
may be
maybe
impractical. Fortunately, we have other methods. Using new types of Correct your spelling
may be
Add an article
the car
car
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cars
such
as electric car
will Fix the agreement mistake
cars
also
decrease the amount
of carbon emissions released into our atmosphere as well,because Change the quantifier
number
of
these Change preposition
apply
type
of Fix the agreement mistake
types
car
did not use fossil Fix the agreement mistake
cars
fuel
, they use electricity as a source of power. Fix the agreement mistake
fuels
In
addition
the success of electric Add a comma
,addition
car
is now visible,as we Fix the agreement mistake
cars
have
Add the particle
tohave
Correct your spelling
seen
seem
increased popularity in many countries and one of the biggest companies in the world Correct your spelling
seen
such
as Tesla. In summary, making both of Correct quantifier usage
apply
this method
Fix the agreement mistake
these methods
very
efficient.
In conclusion, Even though the damage Add a missing verb
are very
of
the ecosystem Change preposition
to
were
made and can’t be Correct subject-verb agreement
was
revert
. Wrong verb form
reverted
However
, we have found the solution to prevent them. Thus
lies in Add an article
the hand
hand
of the government to implement Fix the agreement mistake
hands
the
effective solution and prevent it Correct article usage
an
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from
form
worsening.Correct your spelling
from
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