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Band 5.5

Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples.

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Earth
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 Environments situation has worsened since the period of
industrial
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the industrial
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 revolution. There were many activities that have damaged our ecosystem.
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, the most impactful was the unexpected
increase
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 of greenhouse gases in our
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earth
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 atmosphere. Many methods were implemented but with limited success.
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However
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 I believe
thatwe
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that we
that
 still have
a
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 answer for
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this problems
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this problem
these problems
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such
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 as inventing
new
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kind
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kinds
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 of
energy
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, regulations of automobiles, etc.
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this
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 essay will exhibit the cause and the possible method of salvaging our
environment
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environmental
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 problem.
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 of all , The consequence of increasing greenhouse gases was the overall
increase
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 in
earth
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 temperatures.
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, created serious
problem
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problems
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 as rising sea
level
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levels
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 and damaging many
organisms
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organisms'
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habitat
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habitats
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.
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 the
increase
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 in
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earth
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earth's
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 temperature
have
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 caused the ice glaciers around the
earth
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 to start melting.
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, raising
up
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apply
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the sea level. Because of that, many
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coastal
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costal
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coastal
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area
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areas
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 were destroyed.
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,
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increase
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an increase
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 in
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the earth
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earth
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earth's
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 temperature
also
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 caused
the organisms habitat
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the organism's habitat
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 to
altered
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be altered
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.
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example
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 drastic change in habitat temperature ,
as a
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result
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 risks many organisms going extinct.
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 we need to find
the
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an
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 effective way for combating
environmental
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the environmental
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problem
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problems
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.
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,Green
energy
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 is
a
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energy
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 many experts have agreed that it is a solution
of
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to
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 combating environmental problems.
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, green
energy
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were
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 not created any carbon emissions or toxic gases
into
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in
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 our environment.
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addition
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 the process of harvesting
this
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 kind of
energy
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 doesn’t do much
same
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the same
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 to
it
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 surroundings as well.
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 shifting our usage of our
energy
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 towards green
energy
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 will help ease the burden
from
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on
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 the environment.
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result
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 will still be able to prevent
further
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 environmental deterioration.
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, we have known how much carbon emissions gain from automobiles,
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 making regulation of automobiles
very
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 crucial.
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However
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straight up
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straight-up
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 banning or limiting the usage of cars
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may be
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maybe
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may be
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 impractical. Fortunately, we have other methods. Using new types of
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the car
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car
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cars
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such
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 as electric
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car
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cars
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 will
also
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 decrease the
amount
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number
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 of carbon emissions released into our atmosphere as well,because
of
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apply
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these
type
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types
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 of
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car
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cars
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 did not use fossil
fuel
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fuels
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, they use electricity as a source of power.
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addition
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 the success of electric
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car
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cars
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 is now visible,as we
have
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tohave
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seen
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seem
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seen
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 increased popularity in many countries and one of the biggest companies in the world
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such
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apply
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as Tesla. In summary, making both of
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this method
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these methods
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very
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are very
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 efficient. In conclusion, Even though the damage
of
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to
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 the ecosystem
were
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 made and can’t be
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.
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, we have found the solution to prevent them.
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 lies in
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the hand
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hand
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hands
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 of the government to implement
the
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an
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 effective solution and prevent it
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from
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form
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from
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 worsening.

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