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"According to those in the travel business, the nature of the average 'holiday' is changing. Rather than seeking a relaxing break in a far-away place, people now want excitement on their holidays and are keen to participate in unusual and challenging activities. Do you agree or disagree?"

#travel #business #nature #holiday #place #people #excitement #holidays #activities
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rail
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 networks
of
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 Toronto city, from Monday to Friday - July
,
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 2007. Overall,
Toronto
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the Toronto
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 Metro system was really active in rush
hours
, while
in
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the others normally
using
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.
To begin
 with, the hist number
achive
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achieve
active
 during all the day was in the rush
hours
basacally
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basically
 at 8 o'clock am after increased significantly form 100
thousand
 to around 400
thousand
 people during the two
first
hours
. after while drop gradually to under 200,000
passenger
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 over the
next
 two
hours
.
Forthermore
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Furthermore
 as well decreased
agin
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again
 more in the middle of
day
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the day
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 the same number of
first
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 hour of morning 100K before 4 pm. after that go up like
rocket
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 in the
next
 two
hours
 to peak around 400
thousand
 again in 6 pm.
then
 dropped
dramatecally
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dramatically
in
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at
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 the end of the day until 8 o'clock before
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the close
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close
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 at 10 pm. there some
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little changes around 150
thousand
 people more and less.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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