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TRAFFIC AND ACCOMMODATION PROBLEMS ARE INCREASING, AND THE GOVERNMENT SHOULD ENCOURAGE BUSINESS TO MOVE FROM CITIES TO RURAL AREAS. DO THE ADVANTAGES OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGE

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In recent times, there is an increasing issue about road congestion and lodging.
This
 resulted in the government persuading different
businesses
 to transfer to the rural
areas
 to aid in reducing the problems stated above. In
this
 essay, I will provide the advantages and disadvantages of relocating
businesses
 from cities to rural
areas
. Moving a
business
 from one place to another is a huge step for the owners and their
employees
. One of the advantages is that land prices are cheaper in rural
areas
 in comparison to leasing prices in the city.
This
 can be beneficial to a
business
 as it can lessen the expense of renting the place.
However
, buildings in rural
areas
 are less developed than the buildings in the city which can be an issue for the
business
.
Moreover
, the
business
 can hire more
employees
 in regional
areas
 for a lower salary.
This
 can be beneficial as it can lower the expense on salaried
employees
 with an increase in productivity as there will be more workers.
Although
 it may seem great to employ more workers, new
employees
 may not be as skilled as those in urban
areas
 and
this
 lack of skills and experience can cause problems for some companies.
Lastly
, most customers are located in the urban
areas
thus
 relocating to a rural area may not be beneficial for the company as it can cause consumers to find another
business
that is
 able to provide for their needs and is nearer to its consumer. In conclusion, it may be a good idea for
businesses
 to move to rural
areas
 to aid in reducing traffic and lodging issues
however
,
businesses
 can be impacted negatively due to them being away from its consumer.
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