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The benefits of computers in modern society far outweigh the disadvantages. What is your opinion?

#computers #society
Yes, of
course
,
I’ve
 always been a big
fan
 of
music
 since I was a little
boy
. Sometimes I
also
 listen to
music
 before sleeping at
night
 for
one
hour
 and when I am driving the
car
, which will
both
 help me relax and feel more energetic when I hear the
tune
. Yes, of
course
,
I’ve
 always been a big
fan
 of
music
 since I was a little
boy
. Sometimes I
also
 listen to
music
 before sleeping at
night
 for
one
hour
 and when I am driving the
car
, which will
both
 help me relax and feel more energetic when I hear the
tune
. Yes, of
course
,
I’ve
 always been a big
fan
 of
music
 since I was a little
boy
. Sometimes I
also
 listen to
music
 before sleeping at
night
 for
one
hour
 and when I am driving the
car
, which will
both
 help me relax and feel more energetic when I hear the
tune
. Yes, of
course
,
I’ve
 always been a big
fan
 of
music
 since I was a little
boy
. Sometimes I
also
 listen to
music
 before sleeping at
night
 for
one
hour
 and when I am driving the
car
, which will
both
 help me relax and feel more energetic when I hear the
tune
.
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