Sending criminals to prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training are better ways to help them. Agree or Disagree?

People have different views on punishing
criminals
. While it is true that
education
and job training are better options, I believe that it is
also
necessary to combine other measures. In my
opinions
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, each type of
crime
should have a different punishment, not just
education
and vocational training.
Firstly
, some cases have
criminals
with higher
education
. Unlike ordinary
criminals
, highly educated
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prisoners
do not need to receive social
education
.
Instead
, they would receive moral
education
for their actions.
Secondly
, serious offenders,
such
as murder, sexual abuse, and so on, cannot use conventional
education
. They must be punished, which
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for their
crimes
.
For example
,
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of sexual abuse should be ordered to experience what they did to the victim.
Therefore
, they could feel the helplessness of the victim as well as obsess about punishment.
On the other hand
, in a legal society today, it is easy to understand why people support learning and apprenticeships over imprisonment.
Firstly
, some
criminals
may lack
education
because of their background.
For example
, juvenile
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delinquents
who have violent families are more likely to commit
crimes
than other children. All due to witnessing domestic violence for a long time.
Therefore
, they need to be educated to understand the law.
Secondly
, training jobs for adolescents help them have a stable life after being released from prison. Unemployed people who commit
crime
crimes
after they get out of prison can get jobs that help them
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reintegrate
into the community.
As a result
,
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rate would be much lower. In conclusion,
education
and training
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are
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good ways to deal with
crimes
, I would argue that it is better to punish each type of
crime
severely.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rehabilitation
  • Recidivism
  • Reintegration
  • Vocational training
  • Incarceration
  • Deterrent
  • Correctional facilities
  • Reformative justice
  • Social reentry
  • Ex-offender
  • Criminal justice system
  • Restorative practices
  • Penal system
  • Social marginalization
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