Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion on which side you favour.

Nowadays, Smoking cigarettes has been forbidden in public
places
, like restaurants and offices, in some countries.
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contrary
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, other countries prefer not
imposing
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laws
against using tobacco in public buildings. Both sides of the
arguments
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will be discussed in
this
essay. On the one hand, those who support the smoking ban
laws
point to the disadvantages of
being
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second
hand –
smoke
such
as; asthma attacks, respiratory infections and sudden
infant’s
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death. They claim that the effect of
smoke
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smoking
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would cause more health problems
on
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children and infants rather
adults
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than adults
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.
Therefore
, respecting
to
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the smoking
bans
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laws
could significantly reduce
the
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smoking related
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disease.
Moreover
, the proponents of imposing
laws
on
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smoking mention that smokers might lose other people’s
right
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rights
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by smoking
the
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tobacco in
public
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place
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places
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because most people could not tolerate the hassle of breathing in a place full of
smoke
.
On the other hand
, regardless of all drawbacks
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been highlighted above, the opponents of smoking
bans
refer to some problems which might cause
for
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some
business
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businesses
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. As an example; when smoking is illegal in public
places
like clubs or restaurants, they would seek
for
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another place to
smoke
.
As a result
,
customer’s
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rates would be decreased considerably.
Furthermore
, the critics of smoking
bans
discuss the matter from other aspects. They believe that if people enforced to ban
smoking
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in public
places
, they would be taken away their freedom and they would gradually prefer not to take part in events that
held
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in public
places
. So it seems that it would cause frustration among them. Overall, I would tend to side with proponents of smoking
bans
. It seems to be reasonable to curtail
the
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smoking
tobacco
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of tobacco
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in public
places
to respect
individual’s
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individuals’
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right for considering
healthier
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a healthier
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lifestyle.
Although
it might reduce the freedom of some people, it would be more logical to consider the community benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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