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In many cities, problems related to overpopulation are becoming more common. Some governments are now encouraging businesses and individuals to move out of cities to rural areas. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Overpopulation has become a great threat to the planet earth. While there are many benefits of
migration
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 to rural
areas
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, I believe that the drawbacks of deforestation and the increase in population in rural
areas
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 far outweigh the benefits. On the one hand, I believe that
cities
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 will get less crowded. If more and more businesses and individuals migrate to the rural
areas
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, there will be less population in
cities
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.
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, more and more
space
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 will be available to the nature.
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, the
government
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 is shifting businesses out of the city in order to increase the
space
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 for people to stay. The other reason is the reduction in
pollution
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. Not only will the
migration
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 reduce the population, but
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 reduce the
pollution
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 created due to various human factors.
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, the number of people using cars and bikes will reduce, which will eventually help decrease the overall air
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 in
cities
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.
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, a reduction in
pollution
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 in water bodies and air will help in maintaining hygiene.
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, despite these positives, I believe that there are far more damaging disadvantages to
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 idea.
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,
migration
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 will cause deforestation in many rural
areas
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 so as to create more
space
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 to occupy all the corporations and humans.
Government
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 increases the rate of cutting trees if they want to generate more
space
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 for houses and businesses to expand.
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 seriously damages the planet's health. The other disadvantage is harm to all forms of living
species
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 in rural
areas
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. Since there has been an increase in
migration
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 to villages from
cities
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, more and more damage has been done to a range of floras and faunas in respective
areas
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.
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, the world has seen the extinction of many
species
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 of plants and animals. Only when the
government
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 looks into the safety of these animals and plants, will the issue of mass extinction be solved.
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, while building new structures, the
government
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 should take care of shifting the animals, birds as well as plant
species
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 carefully to the nearby natural habitats.
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 will not only help save these
species
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 but
also
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 maintain the natural balance. In conclusion, while
migration
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 to rural
areas
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 reduces crowds in
cities
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 and decreases
pollution
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, the rural
areas
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also
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 suffer from deforestation and prove harmful to the native flora and fauna.
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, I believe that the upsides of
migration
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 do not outweigh the overall downsides.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overpopulation
  • urban congestion
  • quality of life
  • pollution
  • infrastructure
  • public services
  • economic development
  • job opportunities
  • local economies
  • affordable housing
  • standard of living
  • well-being
  • isolation
  • amenities
  • healthcare
  • education facilities
  • entertainment facilities
  • community ties
  • social networks
  • environmental degradation
  • ecosystems
  • biodiversity
  • development
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